My groups proposition is whether to teach teenagers all the ways of teen pregnancy. I am in favor of teaching teens because I believe they have the right to receive such knowledge. Shouldn't teens know how to protect themselves from such harm?
Teaching teens is a good way to educate students on the dangers in having sex at such an early age If a teen age couple were to have sexual intercourse, they should be educated to know about how to raise a baby, and what emotional/physical obstacles they will be facing.
With the education of all the ways of teen pregnancy, hopefully teens out there will think twice about having sexual intercourse. But if a couple were to have sexual intercourse anyways, they will be educated to use a condom for guys, and sign up for birth control pills for girls.
With teens being equipped with knowledge of teen pregnancy, they will be able to prevent pregnancy at a higher percentage. In my opinion, I believe that teaching all the ways of teen pregnancy will make teen couples think before taking the steps into teen pregnancy.
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Hey Darian,
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I really like that ending sentence. It's a strong sentence used to put your thoughts into words.
1st paragraph:
I think you could stress what Teens would know through Sex Ed or teaching thereof, if that made any sense :|
Maybe you could give your opinion on how these classes could be taught. Maybe mention like "i really don't like how teachers are teaching others about effects on pregnancy. Changes should be made and i would actually suggest giving these teens the hardcore truth about pregnancy. It would cost X amount of dollars annually to raise a baby and it would do this to your social life, etc." Granted it's opinionated, and you could change the wording but to me, it would be some really strong writing.
2nd paragraph: I'll be honest, what education??!!! Hawaii isn't getting enough sex education but that's beside the point. But you said "They will be" so they weren't educated. It's not that strong so you should add more words and stress your topic. This can sctually go with the first paragraph because it seem sthe same.
Conclusion: Okay so you stated your conclusion nicely, In my opinion, you need to add more to this whole passage. It's very little and it supplies very little information about teen pregnancy other than" Teens should be educated here and here".
Sup darian,
ReplyDeleteThis essay is well put, but i feel like your talking about education on sex way to much. i think you should of added more details about what decisions they could make if they got pregnant, what they could possibly feel if they got pregnant. There was very little said about teen pregnancy, but your intro paragraph was really good.